Not quite there
In my opinion, this flash had A LOT of potential. Like, really, a shit-ton of potential, but it didn't quite reach it.
I think the reason for my score is because the potential was so obvious and it was disappointing that it fell short.
- Art -
The art style was great. I loved the color, the character design, just about everything looked great standing still. It didn't have to look 100% perfect and I think it worked out better like that.
As I said, the art looked great...standing still. The animation was very choppy in some areas (I don't mean laggy, cos that's just flash being a bitch). Things didn't connect as well as they could have, various loops were painfully obvious (especially the foot-view running), things just weren't fluid and it was very visibile. Again, the art was great, just please work on the animation.
I'll break the sound down into two parts, the reasoning should be obvious.
Music: The music was well picked, well synched and fit right in. It brought more life into the flash, which is something that the music should do. Many people don't use music in flash as well as they could, but the way you had the music play out was great.
Voice acting: The voice acting is one the parts that brought the flash down. I found the voices, especially the male, to be muffled. Also, his skill with his voice is sub-par. The male character didn't feel "real" to me because of the voice.
There wasn't much to the script, but one thing that really bugged me was when the bombs start falling, "We must run". I'm sorry, but...really? Who says that in that sort of situation? I can't tell for sure if that's what he's saying, but that's what it sounds like. Either way, it's too calm, like there's a dangerous animal WAY off in the distance, not a bunch of planes bombing the hell out of everything.
We obviously didn't get a whole lot of the story, but I'm interested in where it's going to go, which is the best you can ask for. You've hooked at least one viewer, and I'm sure I'm not the only one, which is what a good story is supposed to do.
-Art style is great
-Animation needs work
-Music is great
-Voice needs work
-Script needs work
-Story is sufficient enough to hook
Hope to see some improvement with the next one and I can't wait. :D